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I'm going for a review on this entire series. From the looks of things, this serves as a series of classical nudes. I'll take a look at...

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I always enjoy it when an artist offers critique. I'd do it myself, but it requires some kind of prerequisite which I don't have. With ...

You know, it's rare that I come across a stamp on dA that asks for critique. Most of them are expected to stand on their own. I'm going...


Assembly Line Theater: Mr. Peabody and Sherman by Darkton93
Assembly Line Theater: Mr. Peabody and Sherman
Do any of you remember Rocky and Bullwinkle? Wonderful series. During the 1960's, they used clever wordplay to accentuate comedic storylines that sporked just about everything, including the Cold War and History. The latter was the subject of one of the shorts included: Peabody's Improbable History. Starring a reversal of the Dog and Man relationship, Peabody, a genius dog, and his pet boy Sherman would go back in time using a large device called the WAYBAC Machine. During their stays, they would find historical figures in very UN-historical places, doing things they shouldn't be doing. Naturally, Peabody and Sherman would try and get them back on track. And, at the end of the short, Peabody would deliver a Rocky and Bullwinkle style wordplay joke.

Got all that?

Good, now forget it, because it has nothing to do with the movie Mr. Peabody and Sherman.

Instead, this is a father-son bonding story starring Generic Spiky-Haired Nerd Who Wants To Be Loved #5313, trying to get approval from his dad, and falling in love with his bully. Seriously, one moment they're fighting each other, the next they're holding hands and sharing bonding time that's totally inappropriate for people they're age. It may not make any sense, but it certainly does make her a Triangle-Faced Love Interest Whose Relationship Starts Out Rocky, and what is making animated movies other than filling out a checklist, right?

There's a lot of problems to talk about with this one, from the aforementioned love interests, to the movie that insists Mary Antoinette said "Let them eat cake" and that the Trojan Horse myth is real trying to tell us history should be told in its real form instead of apocryphal history, to how the movie rips off characters from other movies, like Jafar and Kronk (same voice actor in the latter) in both face and personality, how the spinoff is 2D but the movie's generic CG...

The problem I want to talk about is its lack of faithfulness to the source material. Considering it's an adaptation of a series that's already animated, they have a lot of free reign to do as they please. However, there is absolutely no attempt to be true to the source material. History is presented as it actually happens (for given definitions of "actual") with no weird alterations, the puns are, both in-universe and out, phoned in, the WAYBAC Machine is a TARDIS instead of a stationary device, the wordplay is absolutely nonexistent, and the character designs are nothing like their original counterparts. Sherman in particular goes from a boy with poofy hair to a Generic Spiky-Haired Nerd, like animated characters like Dexter and Jimmy Neutron don't exist. The characterization is off, too. Peabody acts like a doting father, whereas the real Peabody treats Sherman like a dog, to the point where The legendary Simpsons made his "quiet you" to Sherman a notable trait about him. Said words are never uttered in the movie. Not once.

If you want an animated work that does Peabody's Improbable History justice, look to Time Squad. Featuring a boy with a similar design to Peabody, a similar premise of altered history, and a TON of adult humor, Time Squad is the perfect continuation to the style of the original short. If you want a cliched, Assembly Line production, DreamWorks' Mr. Peabody and Sherman is the thing for you. It has no originality, is completely unfaithful to the source material, and when I had less items on my list, even scored a 100%!

In the end, the movie isn't worth my time.
Assembly Line Theater: Despicable Me 2 by Darkton93
Assembly Line Theater: Despicable Me 2
This movie is a testament to the test of time, which this movie fails.

To be perfectly honest, when I was watching this early on in my career, I thought it wasn't too bad. That was, of course, when I wasn't counting all the things I'd noticed as trends, including narration. However, looking back, I can't remember a damn thing about this movie. I only remember vague bullet points, the stuff this checklist usually goes over. I can't remember anything substantive, anything I can easily love or hate. It just... is.

So to keep this section from being short, I will talk about the problem with marketing.

Let me make things clear: I do not hate marketing. Disney's first work was in advertising, and he heavily marketed his creations. Marketing is essential because it helps make back the budget. It helps audiences support the movie outside of the movie itself. And, it can help create advertising for the movie. I don't think there's any other reason The Peanuts Movie had such a huge marketing push other than to really make people aware of it.

What I do hate is when marketing is used as a substitute for making the movie good. I hate when instead of making the product an enjoyable one, or a landmark achievement that just happens to have a series of tie-in products, instead they make the entire point of the film to sell as many toys, video games and lanyards of usually low quality in order to pay back the budget, as an excuse to, or perhaps compensating for a lack of quality in the work itself. That kind of strategy got out of hand in the 1980's, with cartoons that were made because they couldn't make infomercials for children, companies like LJN holding a monopoly on video games based off movies, and R-rated movies having toy tie-ins for children.

In essence, when the marketing department gets out of hand, it stops being an industry run by people who say "If you liked this, buy the toys, too," but by con men who say "Buy our toys! Don't worry, they're not defective, we totally promise!"

This is the problem with the Minions. This movie saw an increase in Minion-related humor and characters. The previous film's Minions looked the same. Now the Minions have gimmicks and costumes and an evil form, which defeats the purpose of the Evil Minion trope as a horde of identical soldiers. And these Minions are everywhere! They're clogging up the shelves of children's stores, they're being drawn on restaurant chalkboards; you can't go anywhere without seeing a Minion or two, even in someplace intended for adults!

What even is the joke behind the Minions? That they talk funny? I mean, what is the purpose for inviting them into the commentary tracks? They serve no purpose being there! Why do they even exist? They're like cockroaches, and this infestation is swarming the industry, blocking out all the lights leading to the future. And just like cockroaches, if we continue to let it by buying Minion balloons, potato chips and bandaids, they'll be the only thing that survives the collapse of the industry.

All that and more from the writers of Horton Hears a Who and The Lorax.
Welcome to another entry in the long-running series showing how modern animation has gone off track by looking at their commentary tracks. For those who are new, here are the rules:

• For every minute spent talking about the movie, a point is added. The maximum number of points most movies can get, thus, is 90, given the standard animated film length is 90 minutes.
• For every minute spent not talking about the movie, a point is deducted. This can even be related to the subject matter. For example, in Frozen, talking about the reasoning behind Do You Want to Build a Snowman would be considered talking about the movie. Asking each other if they wanted to build a snowman would be considered not talking about the movie.
• Any time spent not talking at all will not be counted, but excessive pauses will be penalized, especially during certain scenes.
• Any time spent riffing the movie, or basically admitting defeat will be docked one point for every thirty seconds, meaning a minute of criticism will cost you two points.
• Additional points will still be deducted for blemishes.
• Since number codes don’t mean anything, I will mention the specific scene that is occurring. (Let It Go, Fixer Upper, for example.)
• All movies will be judged according to a par score of 45 minutes, which is half of 90.

If you couldn’t tell by the constant mentions of Frozen, that movie WOULD be on the chopping block… except I just found out Disney doesn’t do commentary tracks except from a historical perspective, which basically means we’ll never find out what the writer’s thoughts about the movie are in ANY Disney movie. I don’t think you realize it, Disney, but you cannot continue to do this. If you do not testify for your crimes when the evidence is right in front of you, you will be labeled GUILTY! Here, I’ll make it simple, any time you don’t make a commentary, I will count you as having forfeited due to lack of appearance, thus admitting defeat.

No, we’re looking at Despicable Me. And you know how marketable the Minions are? They invited the little buggers to join in the commentary. Oh how I hate the Gruesome Twosome.

• They start up by talking about nothing at all, just doing a Minion skit. It wastes time throughout the whole thing.
• We think we’re gonna get anything related to the Minions, but they don’t talk about anything at all.
• Talking about character design. A boy is falling down.
• Talking about a 3D moment. A boy is flying.
• Talking about deflating pyramids. The monuments are being guarded.
• Talking about how the animation is hard to do. Gru makes his first appearance.
• Talking about how Gru is not nice to children while we see his villainy. Nice touch.
• Also talking about how Gru enjoys villainy while Gru enjoys villainy.
• Gru’s talking with his neighbor while they talk about Gru’s house.
• The girls make their first appearance. They’re still talking about the house.
• Originally, the girls used to be realistic. By the way, Gru is talking to his partner right now.
• First display of the minions. They used to start like Stormtroopers, but became more like drones or mole-people. Six different body shapes.
• They start to talk about Gru’s master plan, but instead they talk about Gru’s accent.
• But they do talk about Gru-isms. I can see where Despicable Me and Megamind are similar.
• I like that they wanted the actors to act more like Voice Actors and be distinctive from their actors. Gru is still outlining the master plan.
• Talking about the production process of scripting. Gru announces he’ll steal the moon.
• Mention of the writers as though they’re unimportant. I’ve said it before and I’ll say it again, these guys don’t care about the quality of the writing. By the way, the girls are returning to the orphanage.
• Talking about directing. The orphanage head is posturing.
• They seem to believe that having a nice girl turn out to be mean means making her switch volumes. Why not characters speaking mean things nicely?
• They admit Gru’s not a good villain because he’s incompetent. Gru’s heading to the bank of evil.
• Talking about banks. Gru’s waiting in line.
• They say they wanted the audience to sympathize with a villain, and at one point admit it might’ve not been a good idea to make it a childhood thing.
• Victor used to be a hero.
• Banker’s giving his point. They’re talking about the technical side of the banker.
• Talking about production notes. The theft of the shrink ray is going on.
• Talking about the voices of the Minions. Gru’s making his escape.
• Talking about Minion Language. There’s an air battle going on right now and it’s cooler, but not to the production staff.
• Minions interrupt the event. The kids are saying grace. They even lost their train of thought.
• Admitting the cartoon violence clashes with the drama.
• Talking about the graphics. Gru’s disguised as a doctor.
• They admit they want to talk more about the minions then the actual thing on screen.
• Talking about how to voice act Minions. Gru’s giving a passionate speech.
• Talking about the voices of the girls while they’re being adopted. Then while Vector’s posing in the mirror.
• Admitting exploding toilets are cliché.
• Talking about the house some more while the girls are in it. They praise the art director team. What they don’t mention are the writers.
• The girls’ living arrangement is being negotiated. They’re talking about voice actors and the detail in the kitchen.
• Admitting continuity errors. Then they admit they shouldn’t like their favorite scene.
• They start to talk a little bit about the floating Minion scene, but then the minions interrupt.
• Talking about the Girls Suspicious of Gru scene, but then it’s interrupted by Minions.
• Minions interrupt to talk about the Minion Monster scene.
• Talking about setting up jokes for the Floating Minion that happened earlier. Right now, the girls are going off to recital.
• Talking about Gru’s computer screen. There’s a heist going on, but they don’t consider it important.
• Originally, Gru would’ve been an imperious villain, giving orders to minions.
• One moment from the heist scene was inspired by Spider-Man and Mission Impossible.
• Start to talk about the Roller Coaster scene but Minions interrupt for comedy.
• Talking about the camera. Gru is going for the spaceship shot.
• Admiting CG should not feel like CG.
• Talking about how hard it is to conduct teleconferences with children. Gru’s having problems communicating his plan.
• Admitting a mistake in how child Gru drew himself.
• Talking about how to make a villain sympathetic, completely forgetting the very nature of a villain is to be unsympathetic.
• Talking about how the cliché music is great during the sad scene.
• Joking about how things are not 100% perfect.
• Montage going on, talking about why it’s there. I’m going to start counting montages now.
• Admitting something doesn’t look convincing.
• Talking up the writers doing a really cliché scene and calling it good. These guys are really detached from good filmmaking.
• They seem to merely think a scene where nothing happens is considered amazing. I’d say a movie with no action scenes would be better.
• Evidently the scene has what they consider the best expressions from Gru. Clearly, all animators looove false drama.
• Drama is occurring when Dr. Nefario mentions the girls have to go. I’m not kidding about this, the animators talk about the hair. I’ve said it before and I’ll say it again, these guys don’t care about story.
• Minions cause another interruption.
• More drama when the girls go away. They talk about the car and street.
• Gru’s doing his moon launch. They talk about the rocket itself.
• Admitting they make up the Minions powers on the spot.
• Gru’s floating in space. They’re talking about things in general floating.
• Drama occurs when Gru doesn’t make it to the recital. They’re asking “where’s the army?”
• They flat out call Gru a hero, then admit it’s inconsistent when the missiles are now suddenly a threat.
• Talking about a scene ahead of the current one: the second chase.
• Admit they shouldn’t’ve had the moon grow so quickly.
• Asking if you’d take a leap of faith while Margo is making hers.
• Talking about the newscaster after he appears.
• They admit that dancing at the end of an animated movie is horribly cliché. But they still did it!
• Admitting they’re decades behind on musical choices, but say it’s okay because Gru’s old, too.
• They throw out that “unique” word again. The chart says otherwise.
• Admit an end credits gag doesn’t work because it’s styled differently.
• Admitting the story was split around the whole world. It basically means production couldn’t come together.
• Arrogantly admitting the movie was a hit. They have the indignation to ask the Minions like they’re people.
• Admitting the commentary wasn’t that interesting.
• Production started in 2008 which was right around, say it with me, The 2008 Writers Strike.

And when the credits end, we end our commentary. 28 minutes talking about the movie, 47 minutes not, 6 minutes admitting defeat. That’s good for a -31. These guys are idiots, plain and simple, going off on tangents and wasting time by using Minions as filler. 81 minutes total were spent talking, so the score according to par is 28, which is 63% Below Par.

What I learned from this was as follows:
• The Minions are so infectious, so symbolic of a larger problem, they even infect the segments intended for adults.
• The producers can only think in childish terms, considering the comedy is juvenile.
• The attention to detail is nonexistent, them having admitted flaws but not taken the time to point them out.
• And finally, these guys consider good writing to be a strictly optional thing. They probably think they know it, but they really don’t.

And that’s about it for our look at the commentary.


Leonard Lawrence McCoy
United States
Current Residence: Washington
Favourite genre of music: Soundtrack
Favourite style of art: Anime
Operating System: Windows XP
MP3 player of choice: Windows Media Player
Wallpaper of choice: 3050 Upgrade cover
Favourite cartoon character: Vegeta
Personal Quote: Everyone is entitled to their own opinion, and if you disagree you are not a true fan.
So, looks like Mighy Number 9 is bad. Like, REALLY bad. Filled with glitches, flaws, and general problems all around. It looks like all those 4 million dollars of hate money directed at a father who spoils his children was all for nothing.

To which I say... 

This would be a good time for Capcom to swoop in as the knight in shining armor to show Keiji Inafune how it's done... but it'd be so much more fun if Megaman were destroyed forever because of this final indignation. This is the way the franchise ends, not with a bang, but a whimper.

And it's your own damn fault.

What have we learned here? Well, what they say about rage blinding you is true. Your mindless hatred for Capcom led you to put your faith in a failure. All the money you spent is gone forever, used to further something that ended up being shit. Do not make any action for hate's sake; it's always irrational, and it never works.

Now... PLAY. NICE.

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MyNameIsArchie Featured By Owner Oct 26, 2015  Hobbyist General Artist

Here's my account if your interested:
MyNameIsArchie Featured By Owner Oct 26, 2015  Hobbyist General Artist
P.S. Thanks for the fave.


Here is the link to my ranking of all the Disney films that I've seen so far - live-action, animated, Pixar, shorts, etc.:…

Keep in mind that this list changes a bit every once in a while.
MyNameIsArchie Featured By Owner Oct 26, 2015  Hobbyist General Artist
Quick Note: Meant to say "watch", not "fave".
MyNameIsArchie Featured By Owner Oct 26, 2015  Hobbyist General Artist
Thanks for the fave.


Check this out if you have the time:…
Sci-fiman2xxx Featured By Owner Oct 6, 2015
Hey have you check out my own designs of toho kaiju?…
Sci-fiman2xxx Featured By Owner Oct 4, 2015
Thanks for the fave!
Farand Featured By Owner Aug 30, 2015
Welcome to TheWritePlace, Leonard! :glomp:

Here are some handy links that you might want to check out:

Our Rules - very handy for orienting yourself within the group, and especially so when it comes to submitting your work. :nod:

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COMPUTERMANMIK428 Featured By Owner Jan 3, 2015
hey you take request if so what kind?
Darkton93 Featured By Owner Jan 3, 2015
Let me know what you want, and I'll determine from there.
i was think of powerpuff girls z attending school underwater. :) btw if you need help look up powerpuff girls z watery school days.
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